In the past few weeks, I have already translated the storyboard into previs shots. So in the coming weeks, my work will focus on adjusting the pacing of certain shots, refining the transitions between them, and fine-tuning the camera shakes.
In this week’s feedback, my shots mainly have the following issues:
1.The original close-up shot lacks dynamism
So I need to add more movement. George suggested that I could have the character jump down from the ventilation duct and make the small machine’s actions more lively. I think I need to consider the interactivity of each character more carefully
2. The issue of flying speed
In Shot 6, the character notices the police car chasing her and quickly jumps onto the flying robot to escape. While reviewing the animation, I realized that the pacing of her flight needs some adjustments. Currently, her movement is too uniform, but to make the animation feel more natural and dynamic, I should adjust it like fast-slow-fast.
The action shouldn’t follow a fixed linear speed. She should jump quickly, then experience a brief slowdown, allowing the audience to see her adjusting on the flying vehicle before accelerating into a high-speed escape. In Shot 6, the middle flight segment feels too fast, so I need to slow it down slightly to enhance the pacing.
While researching animation references, I found that when accelerating, the character’s upper body may lean back slightly, while during deceleration, they tend to lean forward. This principle will help refine my character’s animation, making her movements more physically believable.
3. Distance from the Camera
In this shot, George suggested that I try bringing the character closer to the camera to create a sense of urgency and immersion while also establishing a visual contrast between the character in the foreground and the police car in the background.
After the character escapes, the movement should follow a golden spiral trajectory. However, I encountered some challenges here because both the camera and the character are moving, making it difficult to maintain this trajectory. On the other hand, if the camera remains stationary, the character would appear too small on the screen due to the large scale of the scene and the fast movement of all elements.
So I added a shot where the character moves closer to the camera：
4. Refining the character’s pose on the flying robot
In some shots where the pacing has been finalized, I need to refine the character’s poses, such as adjusting her center of gravity. When she turns, her entire body might rotate accordingly—her feet and the flying vehicle would apply force in the direction of the turn, while her body would lean into it.
5. I need to add an ending.
In the final shot, she escapes the city and look back. However, this feels end suddenly. George suggested adding a shot where she sees the distant landscape ahead and then flies toward the sun. I think this is a great idea because the natural scenery creates a strong contrast with the enclosed cyberpunk city, making the ending feel more complete and less abrupt.